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THE PUNISHING ANARCHY GAME WILL BE HELD ON 5~6PM EST ON THIS SATURDAY

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MAD HORSES IS NOW FINISHED

That game finished faster than expected and not a single person was skipped. Lets take a look at the original.

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Their life was a fairly strange one. For one thing they were extremely [RED TRAIT MISSING] which was hard for all of their friend(s) to deal with. One day all [NUMBER MISSING] of their friend(s) went over to their house. They spoke and said to them. "You are [GREEN TRAIT MISSING], and we love you for that, but [PHRASE MISSING]."

They were [EMOTIONAL STATE MISSING] by what their friends had told them. In a mere [NUMBER MISSING] day(s) they had packed their bags and left the planet. It took a total of [NUMBER MISSING] day(s) to reach [LOCATION MISSING], but they did it.

It wasn't easy for a [SPECIES MISSING] who was quite [RED TRAIT MISSING], but they due to their [GREEN TRAIT MISSING] they were able to get a job as a [JOB MISSING]. For [NUMBER MISSING] years they toiled away at this job. Finally, their big break came in the form of [PLOT MISSING]. It was only because of their [GREEN TRAIT MISSING] that this opportunity would strike. They and [NUMBER MISSING] other(s) would take up the task.

People would describe them as [BLUE TRAIT MISSING], [BLUE TRAIT MISSING], and [BLUE TRAIT MISSING]. A fine combination of traits that made up a person, so no one thought they could fail, but only after [NUMBER MISSING] day(s), tragedy had struck. [PLOT MISSING] had destroyed it all.

What was left of the team, what was left of the people paying for them, what was left of their friends, gone...... But [PLOT MISSING]

One day, everyone in the universe would know the name [NAME MISSING.]

And the final?

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Their life was a fairly strange one. For one thing they had an awful habit of [Being Obsequious] which was hard for all of their friend(s) to deal with. One day all [1] of their friends went over to their house. They spoke and said to them. "You are [Organized], and I love you for that, but [you can't take over the world with just a banjo. You just can't]."

They were [sobered] by what their friend had told them. In a mere [5] days they had packed their bags and left the planet. It took a total of [2] days to reach [Naturis], but they did it.

It wasn't easy for a [sea angel] who was quite prone to [Motion Sickness], but due to their [Photographic Memory] they were able to get a job as a [Navigator]. For [5] years they toiled away at this job. Finally, their big break came in the form of [a scheme to embezzle money through punk rock concerts]. It was only because of their [Eloquent Writing] that this opportunity would strike. They and [3] others would take up the task.

People would describe them as [Musical], [Calm], and [Foul Mouthed]. A fine combination of traits that made up a person, so no one thought they could fail, but only after [10] days, tragedy had struck. [The terrible laughing spectre of Bopster Swordfish, master of all that is New Age Jazz, soon lauded as the greatest musician of our generation] had destroyed it all.

What was left of the team, what was left of the people paying for them, what was left of their friends, gone...... [they roamed planet to planet doing odd jobs but a ghost of their former self, looking for a way to get back what they’d lost, but] [then they stumbled upon a mystic artifact amidst the smoldering cultural wreckage—the OMEGA MELODICA, a chaotically-imbued instrument with a powerful sway whose keys are said to be the teeth of a long-dead demigod.] [With artifact in hand they damned the New Age Jazz band that stole their fame.]

One day, everyone in the universe would know the name [Belladonna Stagedives]

Here's all the changes that were done in the order they were submitted.

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Mad Horse Changes in order

(THREE CHANGES ALLOWED)
1. [RED TRAIT] > [Loses Time] | [GREEN TRAIT] > [Organized] | [SPECIES] > Inermi
2. [GREEN TRAIT] > photographic memory | [PLOT] > Sun god | Inermi > Kloegarb
3. All [NUMBERS] put in, order is 1, 5, 4, 5, 3, 8
4. [EMOTIONAL STATE] > sobered | [BLUE TRAIT] > hairy | [LOCATION] > Naturis
5. [PLOT] > [I keep losing my way in your mazes] | [NAME] > Fluffy | [BLUE TRAIT] > Calm
6. Hairy > Shy | [GREEN TRAIT] > Eloquent Writer] | [PLOT] > being invited to join a strike team to save a planet from being destroyed by foreign invaders
7. [READ TRAIT] > Motion Sick | [PLOT] > the news picked up the story in a flash | Kloegarb > Piscipleu
8. I keep losing my way in your mazes > you are not going to achieve Nirvana by just sitting alone doing nothing, at least try to meditate. Geez. | Piscipleu > Ariesa | [BLUE TRAIT] > Loud

(TWO CHANGES ALLOWED)
9. Ariesa > viedafo | Loud > Foul Mouthed
10. Viedafo > Vespidee | the news picked it up in a flash > the machine was still operational
11. the machine was still operational > the machine refused to become inoperable | Fluffy > Flufapiniborg Danger Apidopopolusorg ‘Fluffy’
12. 4 > 2 | 8 > 10 | vespidee > terriete
13. Loses Time > Attention Seeker | the machine refused to become inoperable > the giddy thought of all the pity they'd receive from the incident kept them going, but [PLOT MISSING]
14. The Sun God > New Age Jazz | being invited to join a strike team to save a planet from being destroyed by foreign invaders > a scheme to embezzle money through punk rock concerts
15. Fluffy > Vinciena Lucrecia | Attention Seeker > Being Obsequious
16. Navigator > Navigator/Musicologist | [PLOT MISSING] > then they stumbled upon a mystic artifact amidst the smoldering cultural wreckage—the OMEGA MELODICA, a chaotically-imbued instrument with a powerful sway whose keys are said to be the teeth of a long-dead demigod.

(ONE CHANGE ALLOWED)
17. Vinciena Lucrecia > Name
18. [PLOT MISSING] > With artifact in hand they damned the New Age Jazz band that stole their fame. (There was a mix up here so #16 and #18’s plots were fused to make up for it.]
19. Name > Belladonna Stagedives
20. shy > musical
21. New Age Jazz > The terrible laughing spectre of Bopster Swordfish, master of all that is New Age Jazz, soon lauded as the greatest musician of our generation
22. the giddy thought of all the pity they'd receive from the incident kept them going, but > they roamed planet to planet doing odd jobs but a ghost of their former self, looking for a way to get back what they’d lost, but
23. you are not going to achieve Nirvana by just sitting alone doing nothing, at least try to meditate. Geez > you can't take over the world with just a banjo. You just can't
24. Terriete > Sea angel

And here's all the changes if I took out all the ones that were overwritten!

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Mad Horse Changes in order

(THREE CHANGES ALLOWED)
1. [GREEN TRAIT] > [Organized]
2. [GREEN TRAIT] > photographic memory
3. 4 [NUMBERS] put in, order is 1, 5, 5, 3
4. [EMOTIONAL STATE] > sobered | [LOCATION] > Naturis
5. [BLUE TRAIT] > Calm
6. [GREEN TRAIT] > Eloquent Writer
7. [READ TRAIT] > Motion Sick
8. OVERTURNED

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9. Loud > Foul Mouthed
10. OVERTURNED
11. OVERTURNED
12. 4 > 2 | 8 > 10 | vespidee > terriete
13. [PLOT MISSING]
14. being invited to join a strike team to save a planet from being destroyed by foreign invaders > a scheme to embezzle money through punk rock concerts
15. Attention Seeker > Being Obsequious
16. Navigator > Navigator/Musicologist | [PLOT MISSING] > then they stumbled upon a mystic artifact amidst the smoldering cultural wreckage—the OMEGA MELODICA, a chaotically-imbued instrument with a powerful sway whose keys are said to be the teeth of a long-dead demigod.

(ONE CHANGE ALLOWED)
17. OVERTURNED
18. [PLOT MISSING] > With artifact in hand they damned the New Age Jazz band that stole their fame. (There was a mix up here so #16 and #18’s plots were fused to make up for it.]
19. Name > Belladonna Stagedives
20. shy > musical
21. New Age Jazz > The terrible laughing spectre of Bopster Swordfish, master of all that is New Age Jazz, soon lauded as the greatest musician of our generation
22. the giddy thought of all the pity they'd receive from the incident kept them going, but > they roamed planet to planet doing odd jobs but a ghost of their former self, looking for a way to get back what they’d lost, but
23. you are not going to achieve Nirvana by just sitting alone doing nothing, at least try to meditate. Geez > you can't take over the world with just a banjo. You just can't
24. Terriete > Sea angel

And that's the end of it! As you can guess I will be doing some "tune ups". I may decide to keep the terriete (as I think it fits the music stuff better as sea angels have to be in water) but if I do I'll try to add something sea angel like on them.

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