RE: The Ballad of Adler Young, Canto 2.5
10-06-2019, 09:08 PM
>Addler: You are so done with this.
>In a fit of 'I am so done with this crap' anger driven trance you actualy block Estvan blows and send him packing.
>Seriously it's almost as if everytime you start having even a hint of control over the situation some mysterious forces just made them spiral out of control.
>Wonder if when Fuma gave you the gift of luck, you shuldnt have enquired if it was going be *good* luck
(Really, let's be fair here: As much as we like to joke about Adler naiveté, incompetence and nicompoopery, and he certainely does have his fair share of those (nevermind the fact that it from our suggestions for now); rereading the narrative, what *really* screwed up him at the worst moment over and over do tend to be elements pretty beyond his control more often than not. Especialy uncontrolled timeskips really.
I mean Addler is hand of the king's hand. He's scheming to retake control of the situation, disinguis fireind or foes, genraly become good at his job... whoops,he goes through a crack, now twenty years have passed, the kingdom is in worse state than ever due to crack appearing (... a plot point that is till dangling and waiting to be resolved btw, just sayin'), the economy is in the crappers, his dear brother is under the twin influences of the Vulipitian and the Queen and he's lost pretty much all credibility and inititative at this point.
Addler is about to irect the battle for the throne, Estmere is already dead but at least he's got a chnace to take the trhone while avoiding the horrible scourge that'd be the plague o' battle he decided not to use anyway ... nope he wakes up from battle trance, the plague of battle was released anyway and he's getting cursed to stay in that ruined city without having any control of it. (It's not technically a timeskippbut given it involves the character loosing all control, perception or agency for a period of time, it kind of is narrtivlay speaking)
Addler is at a pretty low point already, he's lost about everything but hey at least he's got a few lowfolk and the ixies willign to work for him. he's got a plan to use one enemy against another, he might just turn things around or at least buy himself some time.... but nope ! He steps through faerie the portal, one year time skip, The battle is already over, his would be minion nderstnadably gave up on him, all his plans are now good for nothing, and he's back to square minus one.
Let's be honnest, Adller kind of earned his freaked out desesperate laughter here.
Which sorts of bring me to a second point here.
So folks, not to say but in order for some plot or at least charater develloepment to happen once in a while it might be a good idea if we could sometime, jsut sometime, agree to set aside the obvious jokes, slapstick abd focussing on the peanut gallery suggestions to privilieging moving on with things a bit. Just sayin'.)
>In a fit of 'I am so done with this crap' anger driven trance you actualy block Estvan blows and send him packing.
>Seriously it's almost as if everytime you start having even a hint of control over the situation some mysterious forces just made them spiral out of control.
>Wonder if when Fuma gave you the gift of luck, you shuldnt have enquired if it was going be *good* luck
(Really, let's be fair here: As much as we like to joke about Adler naiveté, incompetence and nicompoopery, and he certainely does have his fair share of those (nevermind the fact that it from our suggestions for now); rereading the narrative, what *really* screwed up him at the worst moment over and over do tend to be elements pretty beyond his control more often than not. Especialy uncontrolled timeskips really.
I mean Addler is hand of the king's hand. He's scheming to retake control of the situation, disinguis fireind or foes, genraly become good at his job... whoops,he goes through a crack, now twenty years have passed, the kingdom is in worse state than ever due to crack appearing (... a plot point that is till dangling and waiting to be resolved btw, just sayin'), the economy is in the crappers, his dear brother is under the twin influences of the Vulipitian and the Queen and he's lost pretty much all credibility and inititative at this point.
Addler is about to irect the battle for the throne, Estmere is already dead but at least he's got a chnace to take the trhone while avoiding the horrible scourge that'd be the plague o' battle he decided not to use anyway ... nope he wakes up from battle trance, the plague of battle was released anyway and he's getting cursed to stay in that ruined city without having any control of it. (It's not technically a timeskippbut given it involves the character loosing all control, perception or agency for a period of time, it kind of is narrtivlay speaking)
Addler is at a pretty low point already, he's lost about everything but hey at least he's got a few lowfolk and the ixies willign to work for him. he's got a plan to use one enemy against another, he might just turn things around or at least buy himself some time.... but nope ! He steps through faerie the portal, one year time skip, The battle is already over, his would be minion nderstnadably gave up on him, all his plans are now good for nothing, and he's back to square minus one.
Let's be honnest, Adller kind of earned his freaked out desesperate laughter here.
Which sorts of bring me to a second point here.
So folks, not to say but in order for some plot or at least charater develloepment to happen once in a while it might be a good idea if we could sometime, jsut sometime, agree to set aside the obvious jokes, slapstick abd focussing on the peanut gallery suggestions to privilieging moving on with things a bit. Just sayin'.)