RE: Art of Domination Thread 04
05-16-2019, 03:41 PM
(This post was last modified: 05-16-2019, 04:12 PM by Dis_Aster.)
S'been a while since I last read through the whole thing again, and the fact you took the the time to update the mirror does wonders, especially considering it's a lot easier than sifting through the Dropbox and finding the right post (as there is the occasional early draft mixed in, along with some unused scraps), though I have noticed some odd inconsistencies, like the sequence with Olpho in Lab Barbarossa. I remember in the initial MSPA thread that there was a brief flashback sequence to the incident that lead to him losing an arm, a leg, and an eye that's missing in the mirror.
I also don't really remember the picture of dream!Rainhar getting his brains blown out during the dream sequence in the original thread, but it seems everything else lines up just fine.
Also, the fight for Adderbear is missing the part where Vora dealt with the building Maestro was holed up in. Like, it skips over that and goes straight to how the fleeing enemy soldiers are dealt with. (EDIT: Apparently, that just seems to be a problem that's.. also inherent to the dropbox itself, given that for some reason that particular result just isn't there, apparently. ...And the Internet Archive doesn't have pages 16-21 of Thread #3, so there goes trawling that as an option. Ugh.) Other than that, and a conspicuously large blank spot on one of the pages (I think during one of the conversations between Max and the Tri-cores), along with the occasional stray tag I'd say you've done solid work on the mirror so far. Just got up to W5D5. I'll see if there's any other inconsistencies that don't match up with my memory up 'til the point where the mirror hits the start of this thread.
I'd also appreciate if someone else who's been around could read through the mirror as well and see if there's any other odd inconsistencies that I may have missed as well. I think there may have been some other stuff earlier on as well, but I stupidly hadn't made a point to keep track of what up 'til the bit with Olpho in Lab Barbarossa. Might also be some merit in trying to scrounge
I also don't really remember the picture of dream!Rainhar getting his brains blown out during the dream sequence in the original thread, but it seems everything else lines up just fine.
Also, the fight for Adderbear is missing the part where Vora dealt with the building Maestro was holed up in. Like, it skips over that and goes straight to how the fleeing enemy soldiers are dealt with. (EDIT: Apparently, that just seems to be a problem that's.. also inherent to the dropbox itself, given that for some reason that particular result just isn't there, apparently. ...And the Internet Archive doesn't have pages 16-21 of Thread #3, so there goes trawling that as an option. Ugh.) Other than that, and a conspicuously large blank spot on one of the pages (I think during one of the conversations between Max and the Tri-cores), along with the occasional stray tag I'd say you've done solid work on the mirror so far. Just got up to W5D5. I'll see if there's any other inconsistencies that don't match up with my memory up 'til the point where the mirror hits the start of this thread.
I'd also appreciate if someone else who's been around could read through the mirror as well and see if there's any other odd inconsistencies that I may have missed as well. I think there may have been some other stuff earlier on as well, but I stupidly hadn't made a point to keep track of what up 'til the bit with Olpho in Lab Barbarossa. Might also be some merit in trying to scrounge