RE: [Cosmosdex] : Partial app opening
07-31-2018, 08:27 PM
Okey dokey
"Years past, a young aftik by the name captain Crimson was helping a crew with a job when [he] fell ill. [He] had to take leave and left the Apollo ship [he] owned in the care of the other crew members. [He] expected to only be out for a short while before could get back to work, but when [he] finally healed [he] found out a freak fire had started on the ship, killing all but the AI. Captain Crimson was no longer the excitable aftik [he] used to be. Years would fly by before [he] decided to head to Fortuna to find something that might end the woes or end [him]." (Missing pronouns throughout)
"Even though Captain Crimson could not tell what was going on and the space hole was closed, [he] still refused to continue to Fortuna due to grief." (Also missing a pronoun)
Other than that, though, I think it's working properly.
"Years past, a young aftik by the name captain Crimson was helping a crew with a job when [he] fell ill. [He] had to take leave and left the Apollo ship [he] owned in the care of the other crew members. [He] expected to only be out for a short while before could get back to work, but when [he] finally healed [he] found out a freak fire had started on the ship, killing all but the AI. Captain Crimson was no longer the excitable aftik [he] used to be. Years would fly by before [he] decided to head to Fortuna to find something that might end the woes or end [him]." (Missing pronouns throughout)
"Even though Captain Crimson could not tell what was going on and the space hole was closed, [he] still refused to continue to Fortuna due to grief." (Also missing a pronoun)
Other than that, though, I think it's working properly.