Critique and Advice; the treadmill of adventuring.

I think that goes for any rule of storytelling. Rules can be broken only after you understand their purpose. Like that book written entirely without the use of the letter 'e' or spelling mistakes done on purpose when written from the perspective of a character who can't spell. Or breaking grammar rules for better flow, or for it to be read a specific way.

Self inserts are touchy, though. Most people seem to really dislike them so if you do want to try it may be difficult to get 'right'. Making OP self-inserts rarely goes over well. But I guess anything can be done with the right ingredients. The trouble is finding them, I guess.

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also thanks for the formatting advice! I need to stop drawing ridiculously huge. Thank the gods for the ability to resize an image