SpoilerCool, things are starting to get interesting. I won't pick favourites yet, but I suppose I should offer advice to people who I might be looking at for elimination.

Firstly, this is a collaborative story masquerading as an RP. At the moment short posts are ok as you execute an action before letting its target write out the response, but as we get on you can actually execute a whole fight scene from your viewpoint as long as the net result is believable.
For example, Zeke and Mike could be alone on a rooftop and either of you could write quite a long nice fun piece about your dodging and ducking and weaving and the thrill at the first strike and then you gaining the upper hand at the end of your post but leaving it open for your opponent's response. Seriously, read, say... page 10 of Grand Battle II, especially Snoomanwaff's posts. He does a lot of shit to my character but I take it in my stride.

And conversely to that, inaction is about the worst possible thing you can do if you want to survive in this competition. Just posting a short "I watch cunningly for a chance to strike" isn't interesting or contributing to the story.

Conversely to THAT, if you're a good writer you CAN have a character who thinks more than acts. Maxwell from GBII is a case in point; generally he's done more in the hands of other characters than in his own controller's posts but Sruixan's posts are always fun to read because of the way Maxwell sees and thinks about the world, and his conclusions are valid and interesting.

That's the big rant, because the chief grounds for elimination is a negative/negligible contribution to the creation of the story, followed by the other quibbles like style and spelling and structure.

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Schazer Wrote:Just posting a short "I watch cunningly for a chance to strike" isn't interesting or contributing to the story.

I feel this is somewhat directed towards me [img]images/smilies/mspa_face.gif[/img]

SpoilerUm, about the 'names not mentioned around you'.
You're wrong.
You'll notice in the arena area, everybody is introduced.
I've mentioned it in one of my posts, and a few other people have recalled it as well.

SpoilerYOU ARE ALL CORRECT.

And Korbz, don't worry, Grimm can lurk in the shadows and avoid trouble if that's what you want, as long as you give a nice story about WHY he'd rather stay in the shadows. Did he learn it from his time as a bodyguard? Has he been making assessments of the other characters? If it's out of character for Grimm to go around attacking, that's perfectly ok. Just explain it in your story.

And yes Drakenforge, in the usual vein of things, I did give everyone's names at the introduction. But calm down, I promise I won't kill you *hugs*
However, Kiren's character's perfect memory of all the names seems... out of character, I must say, Cobra not having been a diplomat or world-renowned listener. Granted, I could be completely misjudging your character and all it would take is a descriptive post explaining how.
You'll notice in earlier Battles people would often say "My character spotted.. um... Opponent? Was it? over the hill." or similar.

Just remember, plot holes are what the Composer digs up and puts right in front of you if you just leave them unattended. Then they break your neck 8D

Spoilerholy shitaki things have happened

SpoilerItzal would have more elaborate scenes going on, but I fell like I should allow the author to respond to what I'm doing. Especially at this early stage.

SpoilerLankie, who is that directed to? Things have moved around a lot, and I'm not sure if anyone is even still near Zeke at the moment.

SpoilerI think Zeke's talking about Xeno, and at the end talks about Grimm who poked Xeno on the shoulder.

SpoilerClearing some things up; I have no idea where Xeno or Itzal or Mike are, but from what I can gather I think Itzal and Mike are in some room in the ministry, and Xeno is with Grimm outside of the ministry (where I am now, correct me if I'm wrong) I use names to keep track of everything, even if I have no idea who the person is. Also, to give Cobra some depth and personality I have him talk to himself often - that also helps me figure things out.

SpoilerHey, what ministry are you guys in? Gadget is in the Ministry of Truth, but where's everybody else?

Spoilerwe are at plenty

SpoilerAren't you on the roof? 'cause if you are, wasn't Whit going to the bottom of the building, not the top?

Spoilernope, i was on the bottom floor